asked for a commentary on Third Time Pays For All
This one has a pretty clear genesis, having started with a prompt that
lost_spook plucked from the
John Seward / Mina Harker / Lucy Weston - timeloops. Given my
tendency to write fixits, 'timeloops' led me more or less directly to the
'Groundhog Day Loop' — otherwise known as a story where the author says
to their characters "You are going to do this again and again
until you get it right." Of course, the repeated attempts may well
be necessary when 'getting it right' entails defeating a centuries-old
vampire who can control minds and transform into a
bat on a string.
This being part of a ficlet meme, I decided it would be sufficient to
write one iteration of the loop — the one where, by implication, all
three protagonists end up in bed together. Or at least, might end up
in bed together; I'm not sure I could write an actual sex scene anyone would want to read, and
particularly not that actual sex scene.
It's not an accident that I also made it the iteration where the people in
the loop realise they can do whatever they like, however outrageous, since
it'll all be reverted the next time round the loop. I don't recall a story
where the 'do something silly without fear of consequences' iteration turns
out to be the one that sticks, but this time it just might. Still, it gives
Lucy a chance to expand her horizons and find excitement and adventure and
really wild things without the unfortunate side-effects of getting vamped.
I don't have a 'deleted scenes' package, but there's always room for a couple of hilarious outtakes:
Lucy gripped the back of a nearby chair. "Die? How?" She tried to force a laugh. "Really, if this is a—"
With a crack, the chairback disintegrated, leaving her in possession of
a foot and a half of mahogany.
Lucy looked from Mina to Doctor Seward, and a smile spread across her
face. "Either you are right, and I am in peril from the Count. Or this is
pure invention, and you wish to trick me into an elopement. Then by all
means, let us have the elopement. We shall leave at—" She darted
forward, and caught hold of her fiancé as he slumped across the table. "Mina,
"He has fainted again, I take it?" Mina said, snatching up a carafe of
"Of course." Lucy began to loosen Doctor Seward's cravat. "And this is
only when I suggest an elopment. What will he do when it happens?"
"You had better take care that he has loosened his cravat again."
Lucy shot her a wicked glance. "Oh, Mina. Before I am done I shall
ensure you have both loosened everything."